Wednesday, December 21, 2011

A Solstice rant

So here's something.




A little background first. I grew up in a very religious household and went to the Church of the Nazarene for my entire childhood into highschool. I started questioning things around age 17, considered myself a Christian until 21, and it took until I was 23 before I could comfortably identify as a Humanist. I've lived around people like our commenter here for most of my life. I know the arguments, I know the tactics, I know the type.

It's the winter solstice today, which is the basis for damn near every winter holiday, including Christmas. I was debating whether or not to do a post relating to it, but I think this rant will have to suffice.

Here's my problem with our Facebook commentator above: A comment that on its face appears to be helpful, kind, and caring is in fact ignorant, hateful, and full of malice. And this type of comment is so typical that the commenter may not even realize what she's saying.

Let's break it down:

My pastor just had a great explanation for this...

This is not an original insight by our friend that she's about to go into. I know this because I used the same tactic on people when I was growing up. She's a messenger, you see. This isn't what she thinks, this is just what she was told. The effect is that any counter argument you have cannot be had with her. You'd have to go talk to her pastor. She can preach, but you can't argue. The Bible citations that follow use the same tactic.

"God made mankind upright, but men have gone in search of many schemes." Ecclesiates 7:29. He says that humans are inately bad, evil, sinful, and children of wrath (Ephesians 2:3)

One of my biggest problems with the faith is summed up here. But I'll skip that argument until another time. Just keep this passage in mind.

However, Jesus came to change our sinful nature and give us a new heart (2 Cor. 5:17). We can trust Him because he is the ultimate source of love, truth, goodness

Here we go. You have a number of mutually contradictory assumptions here. I'm going to argue from the Christian mythology here, because those are the rules we're playing by today.

IF humans are inherently evil, AND IF Jesus is the ultimate source of good, THEN all humans born before Jesus were inherently evil, sinful, and wrathful.

This means one of three things:

In Christian mythology, that means the entire 4000 years of humanity before Jesus was filled with nothing but evil and sin. This is true in spite of the countless examples of virtue and love in the Old Testament. Every human born before Jesus, every hero in the OT, is condemned to hell for eternity.
OR
Humans can be good only through Jesus, or, prior to him, the Holy Spirit. So every human who does not follow Jesus, even those who openly reject him, is either entirely evil, or is only capable of love and kindness because of a God they do not follow. This appears to make following God irrelevant, as God manifests whether we want him to or not.
OR
Humans are capable of love and kindness independent of God and Jesus. Humans are not inherently evil. Therefore there is no need for humans to be saved, which undermines the central tenant of the religion.

Knowing this has made me realize how special it is when people really do care and show us goodness/kindness. :-)

This 'knowledge' is as real to this person as the screen you're reading this on. Maybe moreso. I cannot emphasize enough how deeply these beliefs run to people who have never been wholeheartedly religious.

And that's what makes this whole thing so insidious. Our friend doesn't realize that she's telling the original poster (who is spiritual/agnostic at best) that he's going to hell. She doesn't realize that she's calling him an evil, hateful person. She doesn't realize that she's telling him that none of the good things he does aren't because he's a good person. Only the bad things he does are wholly his own. Someone else gets credit for all of the good in his life, and all of the good he brings to other people's lives.

And she and others like her get away with saying this like this because they really are trying to help. And that comes through in her presentation. It's a nice thing to say, as long as you don't think about what isn't said.

So I'd like to respond with my own cited advice, from a different story.

My girlfriend just had a great explanation for this...
The Younger Children of Illuvatar woke with the first rising of the Sun and communed with the Elves, but the lies of the Dark King brought ruin to their race (17 SIL). Bummer, right? But the blood of Numenor carried the light of Manwae through the ages to give us strength (1 ALK). We can trust the descendants of the Line of Kings because they are the ultimate source of courage, virtue, and righteousness. Knowing this has made me realize how special it is when people stand up for what they believe in.

Tuesday, December 13, 2011

Illusions of accomplishment

Something I'm just realizing that I struggle with is the illusion of accomplishment. It's come up during the last couple of weeks while I get back into a groove after a disastrous November, and the more I think about it the more I identify other times I've found myself in the same trap.

In November I ran some numbers, did some projections, and found out that all of the work I've been doing on my Master Plan is actually working. I'm still more than a year away from bringing everything to fruition, but I can see the end from here. It's one thing to tell myself every day for the last five years that I'm going to succeed eventually, and it's an entirely different thing to look at a pile of math and see that I will actually succeed by a certain date. There is still some projection involved, but there's also a timeline that isn't "eighteen months from now", like it has been for the last 5 years.

Realizing this threw me for a bit of a loop. I told anyone who would listen that hey, look, I'm not entirely delusional. All of these things I've been doing are working. And the feedback I got was universally positive and encouraging and made me feel pretty good about myself. Made me feel vindicated a little, that I've done something good.

But I haven't. Not yet. The amount of work I need to do between now and victory is staggering. More than I've ever done in that timeframe, honestly. And if it doesn't get done, that master timeline starts floating again.

And that part trips me up. See, it is awesome to tell people all the things you've done, and how successful you are, and how you have grand plans and grand ambitions and that you're going places with your life. And it is so much easier to tell people those things than it is to actually do them. You get all of the positive social feedback with none of the mindbending solitary work. You can make a couple friends at a party pitching a good ambitious line, and get heaps of love at the dinner table just for talking about what you gonna do.

And oh man, am I susceptible to that business. I get so wrapped up in my own schemes a lot of times that I forget how to make good table conversation. So if I get a chance to talk about my plans and be lauded for presenting them like they're a done deal, I'm all up ons. Once I start on that path, it's pretty easy to go along with all of the back patting. I start to relax a little, start to believe that I've done a good job. And that leads all to quickly to days and weeks passing by without making any progress.

It's ultimately illogical, that response. When I'm running a race, I don't start walking as soon as I see the finish line. No, no, that's when the afterburners go on (little, tiny, RC Flyer afterburners, but I use what I got). Logically, I should have looked at those numbers I crunched and braced myself for the whirlwind of work that I need to do in order to get over the top.

So I'm working on that part right now. Keeping up the pace I should be setting for a year+ seems almost impossible. I've never gone that hard for that long. Not even close. A month, sure. Three months even. But not five, six times that. But I don't have to know that. I don't have to acknowledge it. I just need to blitz the rest of today, and then I can go to sleep. And I'm pretty sure I can blitz tomorrow too. So I'm just going to focus on crushing my work today, and having a good followup tomorrow. Just like I've always done. It's crunch time, but I've done crunch time before. Until it's over, it's probably best to shut up about what I'm gonna do, and just get this shit done first.

Onward...

Thursday, December 8, 2011

Free books!


I reviewed a book called The Black God's War a couple of months ago. I really liked it; still the best book I've read this year. And today on Kindleboards, Moses Siregar III announced a limited giveaway to ring in the holidays.

I can give away a copy of this outstanding book to five people with a Kindle/Kindle app. First come, first serve.

Quoth the author:
"I just need the names and email addresses of anyone who would like a gifted copy of my novel through Amazon.com. Make sure to ask for the email address that the person has on file with Amazon. I can also send them other formats, such as epub, but I don't like to share pdfs."

Email me if you'd prefer to not post your email in the comments.

Monday, December 5, 2011

I have returned

November was a thing. People I don't know slept in my house, I ran a race, I got sick, I went to concerts, I got sick again, I ate more Thanksgiving dinners than a family of four, I drank a few bottles of whiskey which made me get sick a third time, and saw some friends I haven't seen since college. Along the way, I came up with a plan that will see me with six published titles by this time next year.

Here's the deal. I'm THIS many chapters from finishing the draft of The Nomad Wilds. If I continue kicking my word counts in the face, it'll be done by the end of the month. The first novel I wrote needs a new title, new plot, and a good once-over, but I can make edits on that in a couple of months once Nomads is done. That comes out in March. Six short stories need the same treatment and will take a week each and another week to organize them into a couple of collections. That puts me at the beginning of April. Start the edits on Nomads then, and I'll be working on the new non-fiction book I have in mind throughout. Assuming I am not delayed, both of those get out next fall. Six titles in time for the next Christmas spender bender.

As far as the present is concerned, I'm a little more confused. Battlesongs of Hope is still selling, even though I've been acting like it doesn't exist for more than a month. No forums, no promotion of any kind, and it's still plugging along. Hell, I haven't so much as updated Facebook more than twice in the last five weeks, and in November I had twice as many pageviews as I did in my previous best month. I don't know who you people are or where you come from, but I hope you stick around. Welcome.

But on to the important things. I mentioned a non-fiction book. Well. I has an idea. And since I think in words I'm going to be working through it here before it goes into book form. It goes back to conversations with Girlfriend and working through her myriad bits of individuality.

My current embryonic belief is that that the tendency towards positive or negative decisions is primarily a function of a person's relations to input and their perceptions of output. In turn, a person's inputs and outputs are affected by a number of paired relationships. I currently call the sum of these paired relationships the dimensions of discipline because they create a matrix in which a person can be highly disciplined in some areas and highly undisciplined in others. And the real kicker, the thing that got me to start this exploration, is that in a single given person, two IDENTICAL inputs in IDENTICAL circumstances can produce two entirely DIFFERENT yet equally logical outputs. Yet there is a pattern and predictability to those outputs, and I intend to discover it.

The factors at play are these:
• Long term vs short term
• Self love vs self destruction
• Peace vs progress
• Resting vs working

There may be more, but those are the ones that I'm working with now. I'll have more in subsequent posts; for now I have to do my squats because I have not lifted in several weeks and am visibly withering.

Onward...

Monday, October 17, 2011

Guest post over on PJ Jones Writes

Jubeebee's very first guest blog post is live over on PJ Jones's blog. She writes some brutally funny satire, as well as original comedy novels. Head on over.

Sunday, October 16, 2011

Checking in on a catchup Sunday

It's been a while since I've logged any of my progress drafting The Nomad Wilds, partially because I've been rolling so hard I haven't felt the need. This week was the first in three that I've averaged less than a thousand words a day, and that was because circumstances conspired to prevent me from drafting at all on Monday and Tuesday.

And the reason things have been flying along so well is because I finally, after getting about 30,000 words in, have identified the central plot. I have heard that some writers insist on having a plot before they start writing a book, but I refuse to be bound by such notions. Previously, I had thought that Nomads would be a 'smaller' book than BSOH; the central conflict had a more limited scope, and everything just seemed a little less severe. No longer. We've got some serious world-shaking shit going on now, and Brandon and the rest of the crew are in WAY over their heads. The primary antagonists have changed, and their motives are deliciously gray, rather than the stark good vs evil that I was working with before.

So while I had worried earlier in the year that I wasn't going to get Nomads drafted by the end of the year, now I'm thinking that I may get this finished by early December. Which would mark the first time ever that I've met one of my personal deadlines.

In other aspects of the Master Plan, I deloaded about 25lb on squats this week to adjust to my new lifting belt. First workout I hit every rep high, but Thursday I buried dem sumbitches nice and deep, so I'm going to hop on the linear progression train for the next few weeks and see if I can get to a 3 plate squat by Thanksgiving. Can't push lifting too hard because I have a pair of 5k races coming up in the next six weeks, but as long as I drink my milk and don't deadlift the day before the race (yes, I've done it; do not recommend), I should be fine.

And I might as well admit it, my football predictions for this year were juuuust a bit off. Between injuries and bad coaching, the Bears O-line looks worse than it did last year. Cutler and Forte have been playing their balls off, but when the best receiver is an undrafted slot guy, and your best lineman is an injured rookie, you've got problems. And the thing is, all of that would be fine if the defense didn't completely implode over the offseason. Peppers hasn't shown up since week 1, the safety turnstile is spinning so fast it could power a city block, and for all Briggs has complained about wanting a new contract, he sure isn't making a very good case for one. Urlacher can't carry this team anymore, although he's doing his damndest to try.

The good news is the Blackhawks look solid and I've got a date with the Arboretum and a pumpkin patch next weekend. So pop a beer and hunker down; it's time to blitz all the way to the end of the year.

Onward...

Wednesday, October 12, 2011

In which I review a Mideastern fantasy

The Black God's War by Moses Siregar III is the best book I've read this year. The scope of this epic fantasy may not come through in this review, but I'll do my best.

The kingdoms of Rezzia and Pawleon are locked in their tenth year of war, fought mostly around the vast desert canyon at the foot of the Pawelon fortress that guards the entrance to the Pawelon countryside. Both kingdoms sense an end to the war is coming. For Rezzia, their Haizzem, Caio, son of King Vieri, is prophesied to lead the kingdom to victory. For Pawelon, the arrival of Rajah Devak's son Rao, the most powerful sage in memory, promises to save the besieged land from King Vieri's forces. And in the middle of it all, Caio's sister Lucia is haunted by the Black God Danato, one of Rezzia's pantheon of ten gods.

The story is mostly presented from the perspectives of Lucia, Caio, and Rao. The true strength of the book is how even-handed the characters are presented. There are no real evil or good characters, just characters with differing goals and perspectives. Nor are any of the characters archetypes out of an RPG, which is one of my pet peeves with epic fantasy. Siregar plays with his characters perceptions and expectations throughout the book; what is black magic to one character is merely a different way to see the world to a different character.

One of the most magical things about this story is the setting. Rather than the usual northwestern Europe setting, The Black God's War takes place in a location that seems to be an Arabic/Persian/Greek mashup. Think Alexander more than Arthur. Additionally, the magic system is unique and fresh (at least to me), and is a welcome change from your normal ritualistic spellcasting.

Honestly, this is the hardest review I've had to write because I feel like I'm repeating myself. Everything, characters, motives, setting, plot, message, philosophy, fight scenes, love interests, everything in this book is start to finish good. If any element stands above the rest it's probably the magic system, which is closely tied to the overall philosophy and plot, yet it remains subtle enough to stay out of the way of the story.

If I was a professional reviewer I'd have more to say, but I'm not so I'll say this. The Black God's War is the best new fantasy book you can buy, and I include my own novel in that statement. I highly recommend it.

5/5

(My review policy)

Tuesday, October 4, 2011

Strength therapy

Tonight I deadlifted 300lb for a set of 5.

In strength training terms, that's like running a 9:30 mile. Not everyone can do it, but you can throw a rock in your local high school athletic department and hit a dozen guys who can do better. But for me, it's a big deal.

When I was 17 I tore a muscle in my lower back. I had no athletic history, and basically did everything you're not supposed to do with a muscle tear. The pain got progressively worse over the course of several months. It would wake me up at night, and it took up to twenty minutes to get out of bed. I couldn't stand fully upright, and I developed a limp.

More than a year later my family saved up enough to get me an MRI. We didn't have health insurance, so it took a while. Prognosis was that the second degree muscle tear had healed improperly, developed significant scar tissue, and was essentially folded upon itself.

I finally made it into physical therapy during the summer I turned 19. It was eight weeks of hell. The right side of my pelvis sat about 3/4" higher than the left, and was twisted forward about 10 degrees. Therapy was supposed to fix that, and it did, mostly by brute force. Breaking up the scar tissue was the worst part.

But for the three years after that, the injury never really got better. The therapist gave me some stretches to do, and told me to do some core exercises when the pain got really bad. But I was in college and the rec center was intimidating, so I did enough to manage the pain and gritted through it.

Sometimes at night when it was flaring up and I was lying on the floor because my bed felt like a knife in my back I thought about how unfair it was that I had another sixty-odd years of living in pain every day. Other people didn't have to wince whenever they got into a car, or make a plan when they wanted to lie down or stand up. Other people could sneeze or cough without feeling like they'd been hit with an ice pick. It was very, very frustrating.

But one day in spring of 2007, a few months after I graduated college, I felt a flare up coming on while I was sitting at my computer. They always started as a sort of hot tightness just above my hip. And I must have been fed up already that day because I just could not take it anymore. Swearing my head off, I looked up some real exercises and got down on the floor. If I hurt because I was weak, motherfucker, I'm not going to be weak anymore.

A half hour later, I had done 7 situps and 3 pushups. It hurt so much I don't remember much except the last situp. Staring at the ceiling, sun glaring through the window, knowing that moving would hurt that much more, trying to convince myself that doing ONE MORE situp would pay off in the long run. So I did it.

The next day I bought a couple of gallons of water to use as weights because I was too intimidated to buy dumbbells. I told myself that I'd try doing exercises every other day for six weeks, and if things got better, I'd stick with it.

They did, and I did.

I went from bodyweight exercises to dumbbells, dumbbells to machines, machines to barbells. It took a couple of years before I stopped having flare ups on a regular basis. They're still a possibility now; that scar tissue won't go away without surgery, but when they happen I know a routine that smooths them out in one week.

Eight years ago my physical therapist told me to strengthen my core to manage the pain. Tonight I deadlifted 300 pounds, and there was no pain.

Tuesday, September 27, 2011

Fall is the best season of all the seasons

Fall replaced summer as my favorite season right around the time I went to college. Summers were hot, boring, and filled with days painting fences at the local high school. Autumns were cool, exciting, and filled with days learning cool shit and hanging out with friends. I don't work as a groundskeeper anymore, and there aren't any month-long reunions planned, but fall is still the best season.

Because fall is when school starts, fall is a great time to really hunker down and get things done. Just because you're not in school is no reason to let that classical conditioning lapse. Fall is a time for change, a time to get things started. You've got 6 months of long nights ahead of you, and no excuses that the weather is too nice to be productive.

Now, finally, we get to eat fall food. Some people say that 6 months of nothing but apples in the produce section is boring. Those people are communists. What's that, summer? Hamburgers? Boom, beef stew. Watermelon? Hot chocolate. What you got? Margaritas? Double IPAs. Chicken wings? Bitch, football Sundays INVENTED chicken wings. Get out of here.

And it's the return of robe and sweatshirt weather. There's something to be said for going shirtless in the summer, but there are not many things better than wrapping up on the couch in a robe, or taking a walk through some crunchy leaves with a lady who holds your hand inside your hoodie pocket.

As I mentioned earlier, we also get football season. Even though the Bears are schizophrenic, football season is still the best single sporting event of the year. Sorry, Olympics. Sorry, March Madness. Sorry, Lord Stanley. Y'ain't got nothin' on the highs and lows, the drama and the rivalries of the 20 weeks leading up to the Super Bowl.

But maybe the best part of fall is how it lends itself to the appreciation of now. Fall is a fleeting season. On one end it gets crowded by Indian summers, and on the other it gets crowded by Thanksgiving snowfalls. The leaves stay colorful on the trees for a week, maybe two. If you aren't paying attention to fall, you may miss it. It's a subtle season, and the more you are aware of your self and your surroundings, the more you'll enjoy it. So take the time. Sleep with the window open even if it's a little cold. Take a walk in a forest preserve, and don't worry about the trails. Have some coffee on the porch when you can see the steam coming off the cup. Read with a blanket.

Fall is here, and the weeks roll onward...

Tuesday, September 13, 2011

My review policy

There's been some discussion over on Kindleboards about the ethics, validity, and worth of independent authors reviewing the books by other independent authors. Some say it's an incestuous circle jerk, and contributes to the perception that independent authors are shady, nepotistic egomaniacs who fluff their peers regardless of quality. Others say that authors reviewing authors is a time-honored tradition, and that being independent does not rob one of objectivity or experience. I can see both sides.

As a disclaimer, I write the reviews on this site primarily as recommendations to friends. That means I'm not going to review a book that I wouldn't recommend to people I know, so you're not going to see bad reviews on this blog. I don't review everything I read because I got shit to do, and I'm not going to let a bad or mediocre book take up any more of my time than it already has.

So you already know my view on this. Yes, there is a chance that some author takes offense to something I say in a four star review and alt-bombs Battlesongs with 1 star reviews, but I like to have more faith in humanity than that. If anyone can write a book good enough that I recommend it to friends, I believe they can handle a negative word about some secondary characters without losing their shit.

And so call me biased if you'd like because I won't roast some of the many bad books I've read on this site. There are other sites for that. When my sister calls me from Barnes and Noble asking for a book suggestion, I don't spend five minutes ripping on bad books either.

Friday, September 9, 2011

In which I review a book about a demon-possessed rock band

Voice by Joseph Garraty is a difficult book to rank. It's good, let's get that out of the way right now. But even a few days after finishing it, I'm unable to decide whether its high points (which are VERY high) make up for its low points (which are rather meh) enough to give it the highest ranking.

John Tsiboukas is the lead singer and clear weak link in his band Ragman after he convinces the cynical sexpot Stephanie Case to join as lead guitarist. Seeing the talent around him, and feeling his dream of pulling himself out of poverty via rockstardom fading away, John makes a deal with a demon who manifests as Johnny Tango, John's stage personality who wears leather jackets and has a killer voice. Johnny Tango takes over more and more of John's actions, and Ragman's shows begin converting more and more people into Johnny's 'disciples', violent, zombie like people who are insanely devoted to Johnny.

The strengths of Voice are apparent. The opening chapter is one of the creepiest, most gripping openings to a book I've ever read, regardless of genre, publisher, or format. The characters of John/Johnny and Case are as real as can be, and the scenes with the band performing are so well done you can almost hear the music. The top-tier antagonist, referred to as the man in the black suit (explicitly NOT the devil) is deliciously creepy and very well written for the brief time he appears. His right-hand-man, Douglas, takes a larger role and is quite fun to dislike.

But the weaknesses are what make me conflicted. All but one of the secondary characters (Erin, the band's manager being the exception) are largely one-dimensional. This includes the band's bassists, which is a problem due to how central they are to the overall conflict. Additionally, Johnny's motives are never explained; it seems his goals are simply to create disciples in order to spread violence, which seems shallow. This makes the disciples behavior somewhat confusing. I felt that Garraty may have tried to explain their behavior in a dream sequence, but the allusions and metaphors eluded me; this may be my own failing rather than the author's.

Overall I would recommend Voice to anyone. It's not quite horror, it's not quite fantasy; it has the same plain yet otherworldly feeling that some of Stephen King's books have, without the fart jokes. The writing is crisp enough that you don't notice it, and the highs are high enough to keep you engaged through till the end.

4/5 stars

Thursday, September 8, 2011

Football 2011

Football season has finally arrived. Last year, the Monsters of the Midway, the Chicago Bears, lost to those twaddling cheeseheads, the damn Green Bay Packers, in the NFC Championship game. The Bears surprised everyone in 2010 by going 11-5 and winning the NFC North for the third time in 6 years, during a season they were widely predicted to finish at or below .500.

This year appears to be more of the same. General consensus is that the Bears will be lucky to win 8 games and will miss the playoffs. Sports media further aggravates these insults by projecting that the Detroit Lions, who have won eight games over the last three years, will finish ahead of the Bears in the NFC North.

The 2011 Bears have one of the most difficult schedules in the league, based on opponents' 2010 records. I'd like to offer my own thoughts and predictions based on the Bears team as they appear to me independent of their schedule.

Most of the key players on defense are on the wrong side of 30. They can all still play at a high level (witness Urlacher's Pro Bowl selection at 32), but the chance of injury is higher with older players, and the backups are untested at best. I think the defense has another year, maybe two, of elite play left in them, but the window is closing.

That said, Henry Melton is the best defensive prospect the Bears have had in years. Lovie Smith's defense relies on a dominating 3-technique tackle, and Melton looks like he can fit the bill.

An injury to any of the starting linebackers would cripple the defense.

Aside from Charles Tillman, the Bears starting cornerbacks are not noticeably better than their backups. This could be a problem given their schedule.

If Brandon Meriweather replaces Major Wright as the starting free safety, it will be trading a 24 year old who makes big plays on the ball at the expense of solid tackling and good coverage for a 28 year old who makes big plays on the ball at the expense of solid tackling and good coverage.

The offensive line looks to be leaps and bounds better than the one that gave up 52 sacks last year. Losing Olin Kruetz hurts from a cohesion and leadership standpoint, but the unit as a whole is more physical and more talented than the one from last year.

Because of the improvements on the O-line, I expect Jay Cutler to take another step forward at QB. The Bears receiver problems are overblown, and if Cutler can stay upright, I don't think throwing 30 TDs is out of the question.

Matt Forte deserves a raise. Lance Briggs does not.

The threat of Devin Hester on punt returns is overstated. I encourage opposing teams to kick to him, preferably low, line drive style punts. Don't be a wuss; kick it to Hester. What's the worst that can happen?

Hopefully the shock collar that Lovie Smith strapped on Mike Martz during the 2010 bye week still works, and will keep Martz from calling 8 consecutive pass plays to open games this year.

Final prediction: 10-6, 2nd in NFC North, wildcard playoff berth.

Friday, September 2, 2011

Wednesday, August 31, 2011

How's this for a birthday present?


The cover for Battlesongs came in today, courtesy of Daniele Serra, and it is fucking awesome.

Thursday, August 25, 2011

"Sooner or later...

... if you're any kind of man, you got to step up, step out, and see what the fuck you got."

Battlesongs of Hope manuscript went out to Lucky Bat Books today for formatting.

Friday, August 19, 2011

The blurb process

Whether you call it a blurb, a product description, or a pitch, writing it sucks. The goal is to convince someone in 200 words or less why they should read your 200+ page book. If you have a short book and a long blurb, you get one word per page. This is something you've spent, at minimum, several months writing, and you have about 30 seconds and one or two paragraphs to convince someone that it's worth reading.

It SUCKS.

When I first sent off Battlesongs of Hope to agents, writing the queries was a nightmare. My thought process while writing the pitch part of the query went something like, "JUST PLEASE READ THE FIRST PAGE YOU'LL LOVE IT PLEASE JUST SKIM THE ACTUAL BOOK IT'S SO GOOD!"

What it actually said was this:

Civilization fell apart, and no one knew why. After years of anarchy, broken spirits languish in the ruins waiting to die.

Jacob Vogel scrapes together a living and a sense of purpose by working as a mechanic in a sprawling, ruined city once ruled by an oligarchy of Wizards. But the violent murder of his only surviving friend drives him out of the city on the verge of suicide.

Jacob wanders the hinterlands battling disease, dehydration, and wild animals for weeks. His travels bring him to clues about civilization's fall, a woman who teaches him to love life, and to the discovery of an impending crisis that dwarfs what came before.

Jacob's story is told in honest, direct language that shows the reader a man who doesn't consider himself or his experiences extraordinary. Four chapter-length flashbacks broaden the scope of the story beyond Jacob's immediate perspective.



This is a decent summary of what happens in Battlesongs, even three years and some extensive edits later. But it kind of... skips. There's no coherent story, because it's missing about 350 pages that turn that summary into a story. You can see my intent in this blurb; the descriptions might be interesting enough to get someone to say, "Huh. I like wizards, maybe I'll take a look." But this approach depends on two assumptions I have no right to make.
1: The
summary of the setting of BSOH is interesting to someone who is unfamiliar with it.
2: People are willing to take a chance with their time reading an unfamiliar fantasy by an unknown author. There are THOUSANDS of books that fit this description, and there's nothing in the blurb above to set me apart.

Both of the above assumptions violate one of my key tenants as an author: NO ONE CARES!

People do not owe me their time. Fact is, no one cares about my story unless I give them a good reason to, and because the above blurb does nothing to set me apart from anyone else, I haven't given the reader a good reason to give me their time.

That blurb racked up about 20 some rejections, for good reason. Two years later, Girlfriend came along and made me revise it. My thought process went something like, "Hey, movie trailers get people interested in movies; why not make my blurb read like a movie trailer?"

This is how it turned out:

Five years ago something killed the Wizards and plunged all of civilization into anarchy. No one knew how, or why.

The Chaos that followed forced Jacob Vogel to become as hard and as cruel as the gangs that claimed his friends and family. Years of violence and futilely trying to forge an honest, dignified life drive Jacob to the verge of suicide and into the untamed hinterlands.

The hinterlands offer Jacob a new life. A wife and family, peace, work that makes people’s lives better; unimaginable blessings after a lifetime of suffering. But the city’s mysteries and malice have a long reach. In an abandoned farmhouse, Jacob learns the true nature of the Anarchist Murmur, the Wizards' bane, as well as the terrifying reason for the Wizards' extermination. A monstrous army led by the last magic-users in the world survived the Anarchist Murmur’s crusade, and have returned to scourge humanity from the Wizards’ realm.

Fighting means launching an impossible crusade, returning to violence to defend the only peace he’s ever known. But the truth behind the Anarchist Murmur turned Jacob’s life upside down, and he swears he'll never be a slave again.


If you squint, you can see how a particularly active imagination could tag along with this blurb and become interested enough to give the first page of the book a try. It's certainly more exciting than the first, but it still jumps around for someone who's unfamiliar with the book. In 192 words I introduce the main character, Jacob, Wizards capital W, some major events in Jacob's life, something called the Anarchist Murmur that somehow relates to Wizards capital W, and then an army that somehow Jacob has to fight because of the Anarchist and oh dear I've gone crosseyed.

No one owes me the time it takes to decipher this. It works as a moderately interesting account of events in the book, but there's too much proprietary information in too small of a package for anyone to really get their brain around it in the time it takes them to throw the query away or click off the Amazon page.

This second blurb racked up another half dozen rejection letters from agencies, but did get one small publisher interested enough to extend an offer which I ultimately walked away from. It was better, but it wasn't good.

When I started working with Lucky Bat, I now had to write something that ACTUAL READERS would see when the "Buy Now" button was staring them down. This is for actual dollars, not a contract, and I came up with this:

When the Wizards died, Jacob Vogel thought humanity could finally throw off the shackles of slavery. The years of chaos that followed left Jacob's family dead, his personality warped, and the Wizards' city in ruins. Wracked by guilt after failing to prevent his only remaining friend's murder, Jacob wanders to the edge of suicide and there discovers the truth. The mysterious force that killed the Wizards has been driving the violence plaguing humanity, ensuring no one would be prepared for the unthinkable. The Wizards have transformed into a monstrous, genocidal army, and they're returning for revenge.

First, it's cleaner. Not nearly as much information, about half as long, and a much more direct focus. At this point, the real underlying problem starts to emerge: this paragraph says what HAPPENS in Battlesongs. What it does not do is describe what the book is ABOUT. Girlfriend, being the editor she is, had some stern words for me when I showed her this.

Something wasn't clicking for me. And because I need to kick ass wholesale at this blurb if anyone is going to buy the book, I strip mined my bookshelf and spent a couple of hours studying the back covers and trying to figure out why
I bought the books I bought.

I
thought I bought books because of all of the cool shit that happens in them. I expected to see blurbs talking about how bitchin the stories were, because that's what I remember from reading them.

What I
actually found was that was true for exactly ONE of the books I own. The VAST majority of the other back cover blurbs made me interested in the main character, in one way or another. A slightly smaller majority doubled up on that and made me interested in the main character's personal conflict. This is NOT the main conflict of the story (news to me). When I revealed my discovery to Girlfriend, she had more stern words for me, but in the "How the hell didn't you know that?" sort of way.

She explained that the appeal of books for most people is NOT:
"Isn't it cool that [plot happens / setting exists]."
Instead, the appeal is:
"Wouldn't it be cool if I [were the MC / did these things]."

A couple of days later I sent the blurb that is going to accompany BSOH when it goes off into the wild.

Jacob Vogel considers himself one of the few decent men left in the world. During the riots following the ruling Wizards' downfall, he tried to provide for those close to him through his work as a mechanic. But the chaos kept spreading, and his skills with machines couldn't keep the violence at bay; he watched his sister's murder and killed his best friend with his own hand. The years of brutality finally broke him and drove him from the ruined Wizards' city. The hinterlands are a new world and offer a chance to build a new life. He finds peace, compassion, even love. But the city's corruption has spread farther than he could have imagined.

When the Wizards' legacy returns to enslave humanity, Jacob has a choice. He can run, abandon his family to their fate, and acquiesce to the world's depravity like he has so many times before. Or he can face his past, discover the power of redemption, and wield the human spirit as the only hope against tyranny.

In this final version, Jacob as a character takes precedence over Jacob's experiences. His internal struggles take precedence over the external conflict that drives the plot. This gives the reader a foothold in an unfamiliar world, because Jacob's character and conflict are familiar: someone who stands up for what's right, even when the whole world is against him. It's short, it's focused, and it's interesting.

Each of the first three blurbs took one or two solid writing days to craft. The final one took a week. I have no idea how much it will help or hurt BSOH when real people read it, but I do know that I have a much better chance to get someone to sample the first page of the book now than I did when I was begging them to.

Onward, in 150 words or less.

Monday, August 1, 2011

Harnessing anger

I spend a lot of time being angry and not a lot of time showing it. When I write, or when I want to write, I get rather emotional, and the productive, healthy way to work through that is to write. I pace, I talk to myself, I yell at my computer, I act out the things that I'm describing, etc. I do it and then I can return to being a normal human being and function as if I wasn't constantly imagining spaceships flying around the room while wizards fight on the table.

But when I can't write when I want to write, I get angry. And since I spend about 60% of my waking life either at work or doing work-related things, I get angry a lot. Not in the petulant, "Baww, I is bored and so I wish I could do stories," kind of way. Rather in the "My life is ticking away while I sit here and read an email debate about the number of characters that should be allowed in a software field and holy fuck no one fucking cares and I'm dying while I sit here and my brain capacity is slowly withering from neglect and routine and AAAAAAAAAA LET ME DO SOMETHING THAT MATTERS."

You could say that stories about wizards and spaceships don't matter. My reply to that is if you can't see how a story matters more than a software field, please tell me where your soul is buried because it's DEAD and you're pissing on the dreams you had when you were a kid but are too scared and apathetic to recognize what you've lost.

Also, fuck you. You'll be fat by 30 and will surround yourself with shiny objects that you think give you self worth.

So I sit at work and seethe. Like the saying goes, I like my job just barely more than I like being homeless. I could quit, but I can see little benefit to swapping mindless tedium that I'm familiar with for mindless tedium that I have to pay attention to. All that does is overwrites a little more of my brain with nonsense, and makes me a little more tired when I come home. Maybe I'd even start to get satisfaction out of my day job, which saps the need to find it in writing, so I'll try a little less and write a little less, and before I know it I'm 40 and looking forward to painting my new deck on the 2 weeks of vacation I get a year.

Hell no. I LIKE being angry at work. Keeps me focused. I just can't SHOW it. I have to laugh at the small talk jokes, and I have to pretend to care about component version numbers. And every once in a while I put on some music and remind myself that the alternative to being angry is being complacent. Complacency is stagnation; stagnation is death.

Fuck that. Onward.

Wednesday, July 27, 2011

If you're not getting better, you're getting worse.

Entropy is a son of a bitch. If you're like most people, you get about two decades, give or take a few years, when you're 'growing up.' Physically, mentally, and financially, your first 16-24 years are a rather steady progression of acquiring more physical, mental, financial, and legal capacity. Then right around your early to mid twenties, entropy catches up like the asshole it is.


All of a sudden all of that progression you've enjoyed reverses. You're up to your ears in debt so you get a job that you're likely woefully overqualified for, yet still have to sink 8-12 hours of your day into. You stop walking places, you spend what money you have on shitty food because you're too tired to cook, and you forget what a gym looks like. You suddenly have no time because of your professional and social obligations. You rack up bills for your car, your home, your entertainment, and suddenly you have no money.

Call it what you want, but I call it decay. Entropy grabs you and doesn’t let go.


It's fucking RARE to see someone at 30 who is in as good shape as they were in college, much less better shape.

It's RARE to see someone at 30 writing poetry or doing art for fun, and in college you can't walk to the next building without tripping over a circle of kids doing both at the same time.

You get $20 in college and you're set for a week; a few years later that won't even buy your Starbucks and takeout for the day.


You're getting older, slower, more set in your ways, less introspective, and are taking on more obligations every single day. And all of that holistic natural progression you took for granted your first two decades comes to a screeching halt.

If you're not getting better, you're getting worse.


If you're over the age of 25, your base metabolism will never be any hotter than it is right now. You think it's hard to lose weight now? You think sitting on your ass for the next few years while your body withers from atrophy is going to make it easier?


If you're over the age of 25, your creative mental processes will never be more acute than they are right now. And you're going to wait until you're retired to write a book? Sure, if your book is just a bucket for you to regurgitate everything you've read into.


If you're over the age of 25, it will never be easier to change your bad habits than it is right now. You've smoked for 5 years and quitting is hard? Try it after 10. You lose your temper with your spouse? Try dealing with a kid.


Time is not on our sides, friends. Every time you put your personal development on hold for any length of time, for whatever reason, you slip a little further. You will not have more time later to get your shit together. You're fighting the current at this point, and doing nothing for one day means you have two days of work to get back to where you were.

Start paddling.
Onward...

Sunday, July 24, 2011

In which I review a book about wizards in space

Arcana Universalis: Terminus is the first of a five part serialized novel by Chris J Randolph that follows the adventures of Caleb Gedley, an apprentice wizard aboard the Imperial spaceship Ashkalon.

That’s right, wizards in space. What now?

Caleb and his friend and fellow apprentice Bibbs are ordered to investigate the disappearance of another Imperial spaceship around an idyllic and mysterious planet. There, they discover Alia, a pixie who has been trapped in a magical vault for millennia, only to return to base camp to find themselves under attack by a war party of the Imperium’s enemies.

This first episode seems mostly to set up the cowardly and inept Caleb for a grander adventure in the coming installments, but the world here is rich enough to keep the reader engaged throughout. The author’s descriptions are as vivid and colorful as you’d expect, although they can make occasional scenes seem like a slog. Otherwise, the pacing is generally good, particularly after we meet Alia. Don’t be fooled by the overwrought beginning; the language is crisp and imaginative, and will pull fantasy fans in right away.

An hour, or two at most, should be enough to get through Arcana Universalis: Terminus and will leave the reader anxious for the followup.

4/5

In other news:

The apartment is almost unpacked. I think I said that last week, but it's more true now than it was then. Girlfriend is putting together some Ikea cabinetry because APPARENTLY it isn't "classy" to store our videogames and Star Trek DVDs on the mantlepiece.

I restarted the process with Lucky Bat this week, and my last minute tweaks to Battlesongs are coming along swimmingly. Got a good month of push left on this book, and then perhaps I can pick up The Nomad's Wilds at some point in August.

Onward~

Thursday, July 14, 2011

Hooooo shitcakes

It has been one hell of a month. After a long running list of disputes with our now-former landlord, including a week-long episode without air conditioning during a heat wave, we moved out and are now renting a condo. I know the guy who owns it, and he just so happened to be remodeling it right around the end of June, which was when we needed to move out.

Excellent; the deal is Girlfriend packs, which I hate, and I move everything, which she hates. But after recruiting some friends, renting the truck, etc., we find that when we arrive on July 1, the place is gutted save for one room.

We cram all of our stuff into this room, and after a lively series of discussions with our new landlord, we shuttle ourselves off to a hotel using some prorated rent dollars and Girlfriend's connections in the travel industry.

As it happens, last week was my vacation week. I intended to get things unpacked and then tuck myself away for some writing, and I managed to get one of the two. Girlfriend stayed at her parents house for a few days, and so I wrote for a solid 4 days from about 10am till 9pm. Made some good progress, and was in pretty good spirits when we checked out on Sunday.

Ha ha! There are contractors all over the place on Monday. Still here today, in fact, and I'd be shocked if they aren't here tomorrow. The bed is down, and my computer is set up, but that's about it. Everything will be amazing when they're done, but it's not the most conducive environment for getting work done.

However, if all goes well I'll have this weekend to put some final touches on Battlesongs of Hope before I send it off to Lucky Bat Books for formatting and covers. And hopefully I'll see this thing published by the end of August.

Onward...

Friday, May 27, 2011

A perfectly acceptable week

I got out of work early today and spent 3 hours reading QC and eating cherries. I could have spent that time drafting, but I didn't because this week was perfectly acceptable as it was.

I didn't write on Tuesday because of girlfriend things, but Monday I hit about 700 words, and about 500 on Wednesday and Thursday. The Sharza's crew is getting ready to meet their first Wizard, and are none too happy about it. I'm not quite at my 2000 word quota, but I'm right about where I want to be in terms of plot.

I have spent some time this week hoping that someday I'll have time to kick 2000 words per DAY instead of per week, but for now I'll take what I can get.

Regarding Battlesongs, both of my local commissions for cover art fell through, and a possible third isn't available for another month, so it looks like I'll be sourcing from a place online. Unfortunate, but the timeline waits for no one.

Training is finally getting on track now that the weather is getting nicer. I tied my PR on squats yesterday and sprints didn't kill me on Wednesday. Missed deadlift day on Monday because Little Sister came to visit, but with squats being as strong as they were, I'm pretty confident about hitting a PR on deads on Memorial Day.

Some more thoughts about drafting:

A significant portion of the words I did this week were summaries of scenes rather than complete scenes themselves. If I hadn't done this exact same thing for Battlesongs, I'd worry that I was copping out, writing a summary of a book rather than writing a book. But I remember that this is a DRAFT. There's a reason no one gets to read what I write until after the second edit at the earliest. I need CONTENT right now. I need ideas; I need a plot, and I need a general idea of what goes where. It doesn't have to be elegant, it doesn't have to be polished, it doesn't even have to be an actual narrative. It just needs to BE right now. If I can see a scene well, sure, I'll write it properly, but I can't wait to see fully formed scenes before I write them. Pictures look better if you have a frame in which to hang them, and I'm still measuring the angles on the frame.

Now, it is time for a weekend of bourbon, Rift, and Terry Pratchett. Onward!

Thursday, May 5, 2011

On being lazy and relaxing

Wow, this has been another rough week for drafting. This week and last just have not amounted to much and I'm not sure why. I'm just not seeing things very clearly in my mind, which is a pretty sharp reversal from most of April. Maybe it's a delayed reaction to day-job stress? Things have lightened up these last couple of weeks and maybe it's made me relax? I don't know.

Although now that I say that, it seems true. I've been slack on my workouts these last couple of weeks as well; today was just the second lifting day in as many weeks, and I've been running once. Not good when I have a 5k scheduled next Sunday.

And I wouldn't be surprised if all of this is tied together. Things relax at work after a couple months of pressure, and that triggers my natural laziness. I relax on my workouts, I relax on my writing, I start thinking that I've earned to some rest and enjoyment during the week.

Which is bullshit. I haven't earned shit, and I need to remember that. Getting the timeline started on Battlesongs doesn't count for accomplishments. That's going to happen no matter what, and the only thing treating the publishing process like it means anything will accomplish is making sure I make mistakes. Best case scenario, Battlesongs gets me halfway to the goal. So with BSoH on autopilot, the most important thing right now is getting Nomad's drafted. I'm still on schedule to finish by the end of the year, but I'm starting to run out of wiggle room.

The good news today is I set a new PR on 5x3 overhead press, and would have gotten a PR in 5x1 deadlifts if I hadn't let my grip relax on rep 3, which threw off my form and made it so I couldn't pull the last two reps.

I'm starting to notice a pattern here.

It's most obvious on squats. At the bottom of the squat, something in my brain at least tells me that the easiest way out of this rather uncomfortable position is to relax my hamstrings and lower back and drive up with my quads. And it would be, if not for the fact that doing so will tear up my ASIS tendons and get crushed like an accordion when I run out of gas halfway up. We call that a "bad thing".

The lesson I have to learn, that I already know, that I have to actually fucking respect is that I am lazy by nature, and if I want to be of any use to anyone, I cannot relax. Weekdays are for work. I am supposed to get up, go to work, come home, work out, write 800 words, make lunch for tomorrow, and go to sleep. That's it. That's what my days should be like.

No sitting around for a half hour looking at email before I start lifting. No reading forums before I start writing. One thing to the next, as efficiently as possible, and no rationalizing deviations from the schedule. No cutting myself a break because of a hard day at work, no blowing off workouts because it's raining/cold, no taking it easy because I did well the day before.

If it was easy, everyone would do it.

I give myself more than enough slack already. My Fridays and Saturdays are completely free, at least until Girlfriend schedules things, and later this year I plan on spending all day on Sundays watching football. My word count quotas for Nomad's are a fucking joke compared to what I did for Battlesongs. And if I can't handle a workload this light, maybe I need to tighten things up so I don't get a chance to relax.

Tighten things up, get mad, and get ON this shit.

Monday, May 2, 2011

The timeline starts today

This is when things start to get interesting.

Today I sent out for quotes for formatting and cover design suitable for ebooks. The plan is to release Battlesongs of Hope on Kindle, Nook, and Smashwords by the end of August.

I decided to self-publish rather than follow my one lead with a for-real-life publisher after I started following Joe Konrath. In September, I'd gotten farther with a publisher than I ever had before; they read the entire manuscript at least, and requested further edits before they could offer me a contract. Which is a rejection, but it's a qualified, not entirely final rejection.

But after I made the changes and started following Joe, I realized that even if I could get a book deal with this publisher, I may not be much better off. They are an ebook only publisher, which means no shelf space in Walmart, and they charge $5-$6 per ebook, regardless of the author. I don't know what their royalties are, but I'm willing to bet they pay a lower percentage than Amazon's 70% for a $2.99 copy.

So I'm jumping in the self-publishing world. I'm looking at $200-$500 for cover design and formatting, and plan on releasing at $1.99 per copy. Self-pub royalties scale with price, so I'm looking at about $1 per copy. If I can make $1 more in royalties than it takes to get this thing out there, I'll at least have not failed.

But however far I go past that, well, I'll find out in time.

Thursday, April 21, 2011

Drafting on slow days

Put up a new story today, clearly. Or rather, not new; it's actually rather old. I wrote it the summer before my last semester of college, which was a rather dark time in my life. Many nights I found myself walking around at night, and the things I saw and/or imagined on those walks had me a little worried for a while.

In fact, I knew I had this somewhere. A few days before I wrote "Of course it's not real.", I saved a file called "hrm.txt" It's pasted unedited below.

For the past couple of days I've been seeing imaginary bugs darting accross the floor, the walls, etc. It's always in my periphreal vision and they always disappear when I look for them. This could do with the earwig I had crawling on me a couple nights ago right when I was about to fall asleep. I've been around bugs my whole life and there's no other reason I have to really fear them. But it is somewhat unnerving. 6-23-06

To me, the interesting part of the story is that I found it creepy enough to include every distinct image in it when I wrote Battlesongs of Hope a year later. The horns-for-eyes monster gives Jacob a scare early on. And the smiling guy in the hat is actually the main antagonist in the book I'm working on now, The Nomad's Wilds.

Speaking of, I'm 15,000 words into drafting Nomad's and have been hitting a pretty good clip these last couple of weeks. Not today though. I'm at one of those spots where I know what has to happen to move the plot, but I just can't get things going.

Part of it is I know that whatever I write for this part probably won't last past the initial edits. It's a narrative in the middle of a book, which is almost always bad practice, but I need to get the ideas down so I can move onto cooler parts. And right now, knowing that has me tripped up.

The good news is I kicked 858, 528, and 600 words on Monday, Tuesday, and Wednesday, which means I almost hit my goal of 2000 words per week already. Won't be getting anything done tomorrow because of a road trip followed by a party followed by chores on Sunday. So I guess that's how things will stand until next week.

I may try to add something about drafting every week on here, on the off chance my books actually find an audience someday. Girlfriend says some strange people enjoy 'relating' to other people, and I suspect that if any of my books do sell copies, some of those readers may want to write their own books. So, future friends, this is the first drafting entry.

"Of course it's not real."

The problems come when nightmares start invading your waking hours.

Out of the corner of your eye you see an insect, impossibly large, a foot or more, more legs than you care to count, black pupil-less eyes, visible fangs. And it's moving. Fast. Up your wall, across your floor. Darting behind you, dashing under a chair as you approach. Then when you look it's gone. Nothing. Just a trick of your imagination.

Now it gets worse. Animals you've never seen: gray cats with a single eye and fangs that dip past their chin and jut past their nose. Dogs with wire scraggly fur and no lips to prevent the rabid foam from dripping past their snarling jaws. There's one running before you on the other side of that fence. Oh, but that's just a shadow played from a streetlight. You're reading on your couch and out of the corner of your eye you see one perched on the back of the couch; just inches from your face, watching, watching, watching, licking its lips. You snap around to see it and it vanishes. Silly you.

Now you're walking across a baseball diamond in the fall. The season's over but the afternoon sun is warm. You don't see the second base anchor and you stumble a little. As you fall you see a man standing over home plate. His hair is black and thick and sticking out from under a black wide brim hat. This mans' jeans are stained darker than dirt could ever get them. You can't see his eyes but you see his smile, grinning man. He has something in his hand. Something terrifying. But you can't see because now you hit the dirt. You scramble around, rolling in the dust. You look towards home plate and the man is gone. Must have been a whirlwind blowing some leaves.

But the man doesn't stay at the diamond. Oh no. He follows you. There he is in the back of that passing car. You see nothing but the silhouette of his head and hat and that ridiculously wide grin. Gone. Above you in the tree, crouched on a thick bough. Dangling something from his hand. He has an axe in the other hand. Not an axe. A hatchet. You don't want to look up but you do. Gone. At home, through the crack of an almost closed door, you see that Cherise cat smile; hidden eyes watching you. Spring open the door; gone. You drive. Drive to clear your head. Tell yourself that you're a rational, educated person. Perhaps it's stress. Perhaps you should see a doctor. But then the grinning man is standing in the road ahead and you're going too fast to stop in time. He throws the horrid thing in his hand at your windshield and it sticks. That's the way you part your hair, just a little crooked there. That's the scar you have from when you were a kid and you got cracked in the head with a bat. The saggy thing leaving blood streaks on your windshield, your hood, is your own scalp. But in front of your car is just a dead possom.

Soon you find yourself wondering in the morning and evening if you are really awake or asleep. You touch a door handle that turns into a vicious snake head; you wake up. You see an oblong scaled hand reaching under your window; you slam the window and the hand disappears but you're still awake. Something tall and man shaped, pure midnight black with two wicked growths where its eyes should be is standing in your kitchen when you go to fix dinner; you stay awake. This thing doesn't go away. It walks toward you. Your rational brain tells you that you're imagining things. Your heart is hammering too hard to tell you anything. It reaches out a hand. Four clawed fingers, powerful and swimming with scores of little blisters roaming just under the skin. You close your eyes. Not real. Not real. Not real. You tell yourself this even as the things hand grips your shoulder. Cold. The claws pierce your skin and whatever was swimming under the blisters now rushes into your open wounds and you can feel tiny worms winding their way under your skin and through your veins and into your eyes, eating as they go. You cry out to an empty kitchen. The thing is gone and your shoulder is unscratched. You decide you need a doctor.

Hrm, hrm, hrm, says the doctor. You're laying on a nice red leather couch; he's sitting in a matching overstuffed armchair. You're very comfortable. You keep asking for coffee. Oh yes, I've heard of this, says the doctor. He says you must have some repressed fear that you haven't come to terms with. How are your dreams? You don't know, you can't tell the difference any more. Insomnia, says the doctor. Take some sleeping pills; they'll make you feel better. As he says this his forehead wrinkles in concern. He's very very concerned because you're a highly valued patient and oh, did he tell you about how he and your father used to go golfing. Little tendrils are coming out of his ears as he says this. Little black strands of spaghetti with minute mouths and minute teeth. Forehead wrinkling. Wrinkling and cracking. Sloughing forward from his face.

Maybe you need to get out more, the doctor says in his doctor voice, which is currently issuing from a melted rubber mask of a face. You look away and look back. I can write you a prescription, says the doctors voice. Hundreds of wispy tentacles wave in some unfelt breeze, each with a tiny mouth, tiny teeth. They come from a black head bleeding red blood. No eyes, horns. Curved goat horns growing from the eye sockets. Grinning mouth with too many and too large teeth. A hatchet in one hand. Your father and I used to go fishing, says the doctor's mask from its position on the floor. Weird insects appear on the walls. Scurrying from one place to another, bumping into each other. You hear gurgling barking from the hallway. On the ceiling, hanging from its enlarged claws is a one eyed cat. Watching you, licking its lips.

You wish you could wake up.

Saturday, March 26, 2011

Crotch Squats

I've been loosely following Mark Rippetoe's Starting Strength program since November and have gotten some decent results on it. Between November 1 and January 10, I gained 24 pounds and brought my squat up from 170lb for 3 sets of 5 to 250lb for 3 sets of 5. But when the weight started to get heavy, a number of old nagging injuries, combined with inconsistent recovery forced me to deload and re-evaluate my squat form.

And today after two months of experimentation, I finally figured out what the Starting Strength book describes, but never explicitly states as the key to good squat form.

You squat with your crotch.

You squat with your crotch because the squat is a hip movement, not a leg movement, and if you're going to drop your pelvis below your knees without giving yourself tendonitis in every joint below your shoulders, you need to squat with your crotch.

To get a feeling of what the key muscle involved is, do a classic adducator stretch before you start.

The muscles stretched are the ones you want to load on the way down in the squat. Rippetoe can tell you how to start the squat here. But the key cue for me is not to shove my fucking knees out, which is Rippetoe's constant refrain, but to make sure the adducator muscles take the load on the descent and initiate the bounce out of the bottom.

When the adducators take the stretch, it is impossible for your knees to slide forward or in, and it is likewise impossible for your lower back to round at the bottom. It's an odd feeling to load a muscle so rarely used by an office worker, but doing so allows for a surprisingly heavy weight to be moved with no form degradation. And moving weight with good form means the only thing to worry about on recovery days is sleeping and eating, rather than stretching or icing tender spots.

Wednesday, March 16, 2011

Battlesongs of Hope World Almanac Part 2: The Ancients

When humans first settled into cities, they did so alongside or at the behest of creatures known as Ancients. Unlike Dragons, which were part of the world itself, or Wizards, which were born naturally from humans in a magical world, Ancients instead evolved out of the energy of Humanity as a whole. The Delphi Archives note that there is some debate whether the Ancients shaped humanity as an amalgamation of themselves, or whether humanity unwittingly created the Ancients to embody aspects of human psyche. Whatever their origin, the Ancients were long the driving force of Humanity's history.

They were powerful creatures, taking the names given to them by humans but never changing their forms, which were as varied as their personalities. No single description could possibly fit all Ancients. Save perhaps for these: the Ancients did not age. Nor were they immortal, as the Two Houses displayed. They could exert great influence upon the world and its inhabitants, although the form by which this took varied widely. Some were exceptionally physically powerful, others raised armies of their progeny, others could conjure magical devices, and still others could transform life into their own image.

The Ancients spawned many of the magical creatures in the world. Shadow men, vampires, orcs, gremlins, fairies, nymphs, and a dozen other species were either created to serve the Ancients, or as a result of their influence. These societies were as varied and as lively as their human counterparts, and lived alongside Humanity for thousands of years. They feuded with humans and each other, had kings and presidents and merchants and parents, and found their way in the world just as humans did.

Few of these societies and even fewer of their founding Ancients survive today. There used to be an Ancient of alchemy and plants, one who was very tied to the earth, but they killed her. There used to be a great inventor Ancient, who created machines for every use and user, but they killed him. There used to be one who was like the sun, a bringer of light, but they killed her too. Michael the storyteller survived, as stories often do. There is still an orc lord living in the mountains, a lord of war, who fought and lost against the Wizards before the Two Houses arose, and his being driven to the mountains at the top of the world saved him from the Two Houses.

Some wonder if the Ancients could return, now that The Anarchist Murmur has come and gone.

Monday, March 7, 2011

Becoming a more sophisticated drunk

I'm an unapologetic beer snob. I drink beer like most people drink pop because I lost my sweet tooth years ago. And while I have my favorite beer (Goose Island Honker's Ale) and my favorite type of beer (American Pale Ale), I'm quite partial to most styles of beer given certain circumstances. Wheat beers are better in summer, and stouts are exclusively for snowy days, for example.

Yet for the longest time, when I felt like drinking liquor I drank whiskey. Scotch at first, until someone turned me on to bourbon so I could branch out. Two ice cubes and a splash of water, pour whiskey on top, stir. Whiskey. Man's drink.

But now that I'm living with a lady, I've been informed that there are OTHER types of spirits. And despite what I learned in college, you can make a mixed drink that doesn't involve pop or kool-aid.

So I've been experimenting, starting with, what else, whiskey. Had to make a stop at the bottom shelf of the liquor store for some Seagram's 7, because mixing $40 Woodford Reserve made me a little ill. I decided I like the idea of an Old Fashioned better than I like the actual drink, and the Manhatten I made tasted like syrup, so it was time to try Science.

After a number of experiments I came up with something I call a Brambly Forest. It's named for its taste; try it and see:

2oz mixing whiskey.
1 teaspoon vanilla extract.
1 pinch dried mint leaves or 4 fresh mint leaves.
A dash of bitters.
A splash of water to taste.
Muddle the mint in the vanilla and water. Add two ice cubes, and top with whiskey and bitters. Stir.

Some more experimenting lead to what I'm told is a modified Whiskey Sour, but in REAL life is called a Puckered Canadian:

2oz mixing whiskey.
5 drops lemon juice.
Just enough real maple syrup to thinly coat the bottom of the glass.
A splash of water to taste.
Mix the lemon, syrup, and water until the syrup is dissolved, and then top with whiskey and ice. Stir.

Sunday, February 20, 2011

...and why I want to win

I played a game in college called Warcraft 3. Produced by Blizzard, it came out before World of Warcraft did, and is a real time strategy game rather than a role playing game. The appeal of Warcraft 3 to me was not the mechanics of it, or the unit control, or even the strategy. The appeal was the online ladder system .

I was good at Warcraft 3 because the ladder was an immediate, objective metric of my worth in the game. When I won I felt elated and egotistical; when I lost I felt hurt and insulted. I studied the matched I played; I studied the matches other people played; I spent time in class and before bed imagining new strategies and tactics. As a result of three years of heavy playing, I eventually was ranked in the top 100 players in the Americas and qualified for the World Cyber Games regional tournament.

All of which now means precisely shit. The game is dying, I haven't played since 2005, and none of the accomplishments I spent so much time earning mean anything outside the scope of that specific video game.

So was that time wasted? Would I be a better person, however you wish to define that, if instead I had spent that time writing fiction and working towards my dream of being an author? I contest it wasn't, and I wouldn't be, because of the things that game taught me.
The foremost of which is that I like winning. I was never athletic and was a theatre kid in high school, so WC3 was my first taste at competition that I had a chance at winning. And I frickin love it. The competition itself is secondary, I want to win, and if I don't win, I want to get better so I can. A vice to some, and in some situations, knowing that I love to win makes it easy to motivate myself in areas that aren't video games.

I want to win at writing a book. Not writing a book means I lose, so I wrote a book.

I want to win at getting published. Not getting published means I lose, so I'm busting my ass to get published.

I want to win at being in shape. Being in bad shape means I lose, so I work out four days a week and eat right.

There's no room for idleness if you want to win. There's no room for not feeling like it, or rationalization; those are just excuses if you want to win. Don't want to write? Fine, all that means is you're losing. If that stings, do something about it so you can win. Some people give themselves pep talks, I call myself a loser.

Playing WC3 also taught me that not everyone wants to win. Some people just want to play. These people get more enjoyment out of the game and competition than they do out of the result. They play 'for fun,' without thinking of improvements or optimal strategies. As a result, they drift. Their innate talent takes them to a certain level, and there they stay, whether that's at level 5 or 10 or 20, they always play the hand they were dealt. Beyond video games, these are the people who are perfectly content to plug away at a decent job for however long they're needed, and have nice safe hobbies in their free time, whether that's watching TV or going for walks or reading. They're content with where they are, because they're just here to have fun. Alternatively, they may feel empty or directionless, and seek to find meaning outside of the game, through religion or family.

Other people wanted to win, but only if they were playing 'fair,' which is defined by some arbitrary set of rules that exists only in their own mind. I never cheated, meaning I never used a hack or otherwise modified the game in any way to give myself an advantage. But I played dirty, and that agitated people who thought a noble loss was better than a backstabbing win. These players wanted to improve, but only if they could stay within their mental construct of fairness. Beyond video games, these people want to be objectively successful, but they want to do it inside an existing framework. They want to be managers, executives, owners. If they hit a ceiling, they exhaust themselves pushing against it before complaining about how the system is unfair, never thinking to remove themselves from the system. They may be bitter and angry if they cannot succeed, but if they do, they feel morally justified and righteous, because they succeeded the 'right' way.

Me, though, I just want to win. I want use all the tactics, use all the strategies. If I'm good, it's because I want to be. If I fail, it's because I picked the wrong strategy and didn't pull it off properly. Try something different next time. I plan on winning this game, and I'm going to have a blast when I do.

Thursday, February 17, 2011

Losing the only game that matters...

Today I woke up at 6:30 so I could shower and eat before I went to work a job I don't hate. About 11 hours later, I came home $200 richer. I need that money to pay rent, feed myself, keep the lights and internet on, and pay expenses on my car and student loans. These are the obligations I've chosen to take on, and my current arangement lets me afford these things and have a little left over to save and go out once a week or so. As far as real life money and possessions are concerned, it's a nice situation.

But if this were a game, I'd be losing.

The rules of the game are simple. The only resource worth mentioning is time, because it's something everyone has, but everyone has a finite amount. In the interest of fairness, we'll give everyone the same 24 hours, rather than worrying about years, which can vary from person to person. The object of the the game is to aquire as much time as possible, because time is necessary for all other activities. And because time cannot be created, it can only be consumed, the mechanic by which this works is to devide time into two categories: obligation time and free time. The more free time a player has, the greater control they have over their life.

I spend 11 hours a day preparing for work, commuting to and from work, and sitting at my desk at my job. I sleep seven hours a day, which is two hours fewer than I'd like. Making and eating food takes another 1.5 to 2 hours a day, and random chores like hygene take another hour. That leaves me with a little more than 3 hours a day for non-necessary persuits, as defined by the obligations I've chosen. That's 12.5% of my day that's free to use as I see fit. 20.5 hours spent on obligaitons to aquire 3.5 hours of free time.

Put another way, I tolerate seven hours of obligation to live one hour of life. I'm getting shafted on this trade, and I'm losing this game.

Which is how it should be, according to conventional thinking. People who win the game are always outside the mainstream, whether they win by being insanely rich, like an A list actor, by minimizing their obligations, like a wandering hippie, or by finding a way to meet their obligations in their free time, like an artist or entrepeneur. But most people don't win the game. A great many people have a fullfulling, enjoyable time losing the game, but they still lose.
I want to win. I want to flip that trade, and I want to do it sooner rather than later. You can have fun playing the game, or you can have fun winning the game, and I'm going to play to win.

Thursday, February 3, 2011

Battlesongs of Hope World Almanac: Part 1 - The World

Battlesongs of Hope takes place in a world that most readers will recognize as Earth, even though it isn’t. Most readers would also recognize the time period as mid-20th century, but those years mean nothing there.

Battlesongs takes place on a large continent that is demarcated primarily into those lands which have been recently under Wizard influence, and those that have not. The boundary between these lands is fuzzy, primarily because the Wizards' lands were so vast and their power so great that there were no other powers on the continent to whom a boundary would be useful, and also because the Wizards are now dead, and so their influence has been waning of late.

The Wizard continent is presumably surrounded by an ocean, although because its role in the book is solely to help regulate the weather, it warrants little more mention.

The Wizard lands span mountains and coastlines, swamps and forests, but the greatest area of land is occupied by vast rolling fields that experience a temperate four seasons. Few cities dot the plains, due to the Wizards’ tendency to consolidate people and resources. Expansive farms turn the fields into a checkerboard of crops from horizon to horizon. The characters of BSOH are not particularly educated regarding life outside of the city, and therefore unfortunately do not know the proper names for many of the landmarks and features in the hinterlands.

The largest Wizard city, which the characters usually refer to as “the sprawl” when discussing it in aggregate, forms a centerpiece in BSOH. This city is so massive that it is much more useful to refer to the districts within the city, which take the names given by the Wizard clan that presides (or rather, presided) over them. The size and population of each district is variable, as Wizards control territory in the city according to their clan’s relative strength and favorability in the eyes of the Two Houses.

Resources and technology in the Wizard lands generally tend to obey the laws of physics. If there is oil in the Wizard lands, it has not yet been found. Liquid fuel is instead produced from algae or plant material, and is generally far more valuable than gasoline. Oddly, electronic computing does not work at all in the BSOH world, despite all theories and calculations indicating that it is possible. The Wizards and most other scholars have concluded that this one discrepancy in natural law must be due to magic.

Sunday, January 30, 2011

Candypepper spice

One of the keys to eating healthy is making sure you can feed yourself on days when you don't feel like cooking. Make this spice rub and you can prepare a couple of servings of chicken or pork chops in about one minute. Cut up a green pepper while the seasoned meat is grilling on a Foreman, and you have a decent lunch or a good start on dinner in about 5 minutes.

Prep time: 15 minutes

3 Tablespoon salt
4 T white sugar
4 T light brown sugar
4 T black pepper
5 T cayenne pepper
2 T chili powder
2 T thyme
1 T garlic powder
1 T paprika
1 T nutmeg
1 T cinnamon
1 teaspoon cumin

Mix together in a bowl, and store in a ziploc bag with a small piece of bread to keep the brown sugar from clumping.

Thursday, January 20, 2011

An Experiment

On the edge of one of many cracked, long-dry riverbeds in the desert redlands of New Mexico, there was a single, wide, one story house. Next to the house was a boxy pickup truck, its paint long since stripped away by the desert dust and sun. The house’s corrugated roof sprouted a pair of satellite dishes between rows of black solar panels.

Inside, standing next to a brown electric stove, Travis Dreame grilled a cheese sandwich in a black frying pan. He was tall, with thick brown hair and an unkempt handlebar mustache. The pit stains in his faded concert t-shirt formed an unbroken ring across his chest and upper back. His jeans were worn to threads at the knees and had been sun-bleached to a pastel blue. The butter in the pan spluttered and bubbled when he slid the sandwich around with his finger to prevent it from scorching. After checking the underside of the sandwich, he flipped it onto a paper towel next to its twin. He was expecting company.

Travis took three steps from his kitchen to the dining room, holding his impromptu plate over his shoulder like a waiter’s tray. With his free hand, he rearranged the mess on a cheaply veneered oval table. He carelessly tossed various circuit boards, antennas, memory chips, power converters, and batteries into a black plastic box, which he pushed to the far end of the table. The LCD monitor, suspended over the table by way of a metal arm on the ceiling, was swung to the side where the glowing lines of code weren’t as intrusive. He set the sandwiches on the table.

Four steps took Travis to his front window. He folded his arms and watched a dust cloud approaching from across the dry riverbed. The harsh sun-glare of metal untarnished by the desert caught Travis in the eye, and he did not blink. An oversized silver SUV headed the dust cloud, following a wide path between rust colored boulders and sparse patches of spiky yellow grass. Travis knew the SUV, large enough to haul some family trees, carried only one occupant. The sunglass-wearing driver, one of Travis’ benefactors and unwitting experimental subject, parked next to the house and went to the door as dust settled around him.

Travis waited for the knock, and opened the door. “Please, come in,” he said, standing free of the doorway. The crew-cut blond man flashed a whitened smile and took Travis’ hand in an executive grip.
“Yeah, hey, Travis! Good to see you; how you doin’ yeah?” he said as he took off his designer sunglasses. He wore a white polo shirt over a beech tan, and looked to be ten years Travis’ junior.
“Fine,” Travis replied with none of Paul’s enthusiasm. “Did you find the place alright?”

“Yeah, you know, you kinda live on the ass end of nowhere,” Paul said. His lower jaw bounced when he laughed. “No, no, no, though. I got a GPS in the car. Yeah, it tells me all the country roads and trails and shit.”

“That’s good-“

“Your place wasn’t on there,” Paul continued. “No- yeah, listen. I put you in latitude and longitude; you don’t even have a fucking address buddy!” His lower jaw bounced again.

Travis smiled on one side of his mouth and shut the door. “You must be hungry; I made a couple of sandwiches,” he said.

“Not really, the heat kinda dries me out, you know?”

“Oh please, you’ve been driving for hours. I insist,” said Travis.

“Well, yeah, maybe just one,” Paul said. He sat himself at the table, straddling the back of a chair, and took a sandwich off the paper towel. “Got anything to drink? I feel like I just crossed the Mojave!” He laughed.

“Sure thing,” Travis said, opening the refrigerator. He heard a faint crunch behind him.

“Mmm! Ugh, did you forget the wrapper on the cheese?” Paul asked. He pried his sandwich partially apart.

Travis looked at Paul and faintly shook his head. “No, of course not. Might be the sand, it gets inside sometimes,” he said.

Paul took a small bite and chewed carefully. “Yeah, maybe. That one part tasted rancid,” he said.

Travis poured pop out of a two-liter bottle into two empty glass jars. He set one before Paul and leaned against the counter, sipping the other. Paul finished his sandwich with large bites and took a large gulp out of the jar. He dusted his hands together and then pulled a PDA out of his pocket.

“So what have you got for me Travis?” he asked. “Can’t tell the boss you’re making million dollar sandwiches!” he laughed.

Travis stroked his moustache and narrowed his eyes. “I jumped the memory past critical mass about ten weeks ago. I’ve got just under 27,000 petabytes downstairs,” he said.

Paul’s eyebrows shot up. “Twenty-seven thousand? Jesus! But you don’t have the funds; between Gaond’s and Palmer-Kineal I know you haven’t gotten more than ten or twelve mil this year,” he said. Travis had secured multi-year, multi-million dollar grants from the two companies. Misguided funds, in Paul’s opinion, given to a self-styled prophet chasing an electronic pipe-dream.

“I’ve had some extra help,” Travis said. He pulled at his scruffy chin and continued. “I had thought fifteen-thou would be plenty, enough for two people maybe. But then I started testing, on myself at first, about nine weeks ago, and the system couldn’t handle it. Fifteen kay was enough for a rudimentary copy, but it wasn’t a personality, not a consciousness. It was like the mind of someone in a coma,” he said.

Travis paused while Paul tapped at his phone. The medicinal division of Gaond Researchers, which Paul worked for, sent him all over the world with that PDA, looking for new chemicals and treatments. When Paul found something the company thought promising, like a man attempting to copy a person’s entire mental image into a computer, granting something like digital immortality; Paul tapped his phone and reported the details via satellite to the company.

Travis waited for Paul to look up, and then continued. “So I jumped the capacity and tried again. Three weeks ago I was testing a subject, and I hit a dilemma. In order to copy a mind at rest, I’d need to use a maser strong enough to fry the neurons I’m trying to map. But the only time the brain is active enough so I can use a subtler maser is when the mind is in a primal survival mode.”
“Like ‘fight-or-flight?’” asked Paul as a matter of course.

“Something like that, yes. But when the brain is that active, the Heisenberg effect jumps a few orders of magnitude and I end up with corrupted data,” said Travis. A metallic glare through the window shone briefly on his face.

“So what are you telling me? You’re saying it’s a bust, yeah?” asked Paul.

“Not exactly,” Travis said. From outside, the sound of tires on rock stopped abruptly. The whisper of a fuel-cell engine floated through the compact house. Travis walked to the door and opened it.
The passenger door of a black custom Cadillac, parked within touching distance of the front awning, opened with an electric whine. A hunched silhouette sat waiting on the seat while a man built like a refrigerator and wearing a suit stretched tight across his chest walked around the front of the car. Travis leaned against the doorframe while the barrel-chested driver helped his withered passenger out of the car. The desert wind disturbed the passenger’s sparse white comb-over and revealed a scalp covered with dark malignant splotches.

Travis chewed his overgrown moustache while the mismatched pair of men shuffled to his doorstep. The small man’s shrunken skull squeezed his squinted eyes halfway out of their sockets, giving him a fishlike appearance.

“Travis,” the small man said. “This—is C—Carl, my body—bodyguard.”

“Aren’t you going to invite us in?” The larger man put his face close to Travis’ when Travis didn’t move to let the pair inside.

Travis wrinkled his nose at Carl’s strongly minted breath. “He can’t come in,” he said.

“He just—just in case some—something—“ wheezed the old man.

Travis tilted his head around Carl’s blocky face. “I told you Charles. No. It’s not something for spectators.” He scratched under his chin and glared at Carl. “He might interfere.”

“You listen—“ started Carl, putting his face even closer to Travis’.

“Carl, wait—wait in the car,” Charles said, touching his driver’s elbow. The large man took a step back and bent to whisper in Charles’ ear. Travis saw him slip something heavy into the older man’s suit pocket. Travis smiled with one corner of his mouth as Carl fumed on the way back to the car.

Travis stepped out of the doorway. “Charles, I’d like you to meet Paul Dunn. Paul, this is the esteemed Charles Maxell.”

“Maxell the banker?” Paul stood and surveyed the stooped man in the doorway.

Charles stretched his neck, revealing dark hardened growths around his collarbones. “That’s—yes. Maxell In—Investments. That’s mine,” he boasted.

Paul shook Charles’ hand with stunned reverence. The old man looked suddenly out of place; one of the world’s wealthiest men, hunched and withering in a run-down nothing of a desert hut.
“I was just telling Paul here that I’m on the verge of a breakthrough,” Travis said, laying a hand on Charles’ bony shoulder.

The man’s fish-eyes went wild for a moment. “You—you told him—the—“ he stammered.

Travis smiled. “Oh no, no, no. I don’t think Paul has ever seen the basement. Let’s get you something to drink first. Would you like a sandwich perhaps?” he said.

“No. I’m not—not hungry,” Charles said, looking at Paul.

“I insist, Mr. Maxell,” Travis said. He handed Charles the second cheese sandwich on a fresh paper towel. “Have a sandwich.”

Paul glanced from Travis to Charles as the two stared at each other for a long moment. A look of understanding passed Charles’s face like a shadow, and the banker took the sandwich with both hands.

“Mr. Maxell has been working with me since I left my practice, almost nine years now,” Travis explained. “He’s helped keep me off the grid, so I can work independently, without the AMA always looking over my shoulder.”

Paul tapped his PDA and gave Travis a sidelong look. “You never mentioned that in your application for the Gaond grants,” he said. “You claimed Palmer-Kineal was your only other donor.” He tapped the PDA several more times, then let his hands drop to his sides. “And you’re in microcircuit science, not medical science.”

“Both, actually,” Travis said as Charles slowly gummed the sandwich. “Here, let’s go downstairs.”

Travis opened a door that stood in the house’s central divider. A black wrought-iron staircase spiraled downward inside the closet sized space. He flicked a light switch on the wall and looked over his shoulder. “Paul, you’ll help Mr. Maxell down, won’t you? The stairs are a bit steep.” Without waiting for an answer, he started down.

The air grew rapidly cooler as they descended. Paul walked sideways so as to support Charles by the arm. The rounded walls to which the staircase was fastened were made of uneven brick and crumbling mortar, making Paul think of an abandoned well.. The descent was lit by hooded fluorescent lamps over a myriad of framed papers. Doctorate of Computer Science: Travis Johnson. Doctorate of Theology: Travis Brown. Doctorate of Psychology: Travis Sowa. Doctorate of Internal Medicine: Travis Taylor. A letter of outstanding achievement in neurology to Travis Sweeny. Paul felt Charles’s hand become clammy.

“I met Charles when I first started this project; treated him for a minor aneurysm,” Travis said. His footfalls on the iron stairs clanged a strange rhythm into his speech. “I had the idea, he had the money. I sought your company’s grants, Mr. Dunn, to keep some suspicion off Charles. This much hardware, as you’ll see, goes beyond a personal expense account, even one such as his.”

The stairway ended in a wide low-ceilinged room. The walls were covered by floor-to-ceiling metal racks, bristling with circuit boards and humming with electricity. The corner closest to the stairway was draped with a thick cloth tarp, blotted with dark stains. On the ceiling above the tarp was a silver inverted bowl several feet across. In the opposite corner, an old, torn dentist’s chair sat under an octopus array of instruments that bristled from the sides of a similar silver bowl.

The fluorescent light drained the tan out of Paul’s skin. He took a few slack-jawed steps into the room, noting the scale and sophistication of the computers around him; mentally calculating how many hundreds of millions of dollars surrounded him. He tapped his phone, which returned a “No Signal” and promptly shut off.

Charles bobbed his head, forcing the last of the cheese sandwich down his dry throat. His jaw worked rapidly, almost independent of the words that tumbled out, “I—I—I don’t know, Travis. The—I’m sending for Carl. I’ve an app—appointment with the doctors—doctors in Seattle tomorrow,” he said. He turned back toward the stairs.

“For what?” Travis asked. His eyes were dark. “Chemo again? Going to let them laser away more of your mind? For what, Charles?”

Paul wandered to a monitor on one of the computer banks, in awe of the technology and all but ignoring Travis’s sudden growls. An animated star bounced around the edges of the screen. He clicked the Enter key on a keyboard below the monitor.

“I need treat—treatment. I don’t—don’t—don’t want to die,” Charles said.

“What are you getting this time Charles?” Travis advanced on the shrunken man, who stared back with wild fish eyes. “Mechanical liver? They’ve already done your kidneys and heart and God knows what else. You’ve more metal and cancer in you than normal cells.”

Hello Paul. The words appeared above the star like a comic thought-bubble. Paul peered closely at the screen in disbelief. He looked over his shoulder at Travis towering over Charles, then back at the monitor. He typed, Hello.

Charles tore at the paper towel in his hands. “But he’s—he’s just—just a boy. I—does it have to be now—now?”

Go with Charles you? appeared below the star. Paul pressed the escape key. Charles uses you? Paul noticed a blinking red light on a bulbous lens attached to a circuit board to his right. He waved his hand in front of it. Hello Paul.

“You’ve been rotting for a decade and you want to wait some more?” Travis barked. He grabbed Charles by the chin. “Your mind is rotting. Go! Fine! You’ve got fifteen years, if that, up those stairs. You have centuries down here.”

Who is this? typed Paul. The star paused in the middle of the screen and spun around. Travis, said the thought-bubble. Paul backed away from the monitor.

“Yeah, um, Travis, buddy? Your computer is talking to me,” Paul said. He forced a laugh.

Travis turned smoothly away from Charles with a charismatic smile that turned his moustache into an inverted ‘W.’ He left the muttering old man at the base of the stairs and moved close to Paul. “It’ll do that,” he chuckled. “Some of those corrupted scans are still floating around in there, awfully hard to root out sometimes. At least for me,” he said, looking back at Charles.

“Say, Paul, I said this project wasn’t a bust, right?” he said. Paul nodded and Travis continued. “When the mind is in the survival mode I was telling you about earlier, it will do anything, anything, to survive. Right before death, the consciousness replicates itself almost instantaneously, for a fraction of a fraction of a second. Your life flashes before your eyes, literally, in an attempt to preserve itself.”
Quartering closer toward Paul, Travis said, “About two weeks ago, I managed to come up with a few neat devices: one which amplifies and transmits that last burst of consciousness, and one which can receive and re-emit that burst. Then a third device which can combine two such bursts, so the first amplifies the second consciousness to a level that can be received and recorded by this equipment.”
Paul felt himself backing up as Travis advanced toward him. He tripped over a tarp on the floor, and put out a hand to steady himself. He touched a sticky and rancid smelling stain on the tarp hanging over the wall. “Yeah, yeah, great,” he said while wiping his hand on his pant leg. He saw Charles shuffling across the room with his hand in his suit pocket. Paul rubbed his hands together, bringing the darkly red substance off in flakes.

“I put the devices on nano-wafers, heat activated colonies,” Travis said, grinning with pride. “Once the wafer gets inside the body, the nano-machines reconstitute in the cerebrum, and in a matter of minutes are fully functional.”

“Great, yeah, fuckin’ good work; I guess,” Paul said. “But, uh, what good is it? No offense, but if it only fuckin’ works when people--“ He stopped abruptly. He cocked his head at the smiling Travis and slowly turned toward Charles.

In a bony and jittery hand, Charles pointed a compact black pistol at Paul. His eyes stood out, huge and round; and his mouth contorted rapidly between smiles and grimaces.

Paul froze, his eyes darting to Travis. “Sandwiches,” he whispered.

“I insist,” said Travis.

The pistol roared. Paul felt a burning tear at his neck.

“Goddamnit, Charles! Not the head!” shouted Travis.

The pistol roared again and Paul felt a punch to his chest. He couldn’t breathe.

Travis rushed to a monitor as Paul fell to his knees. He scanned the rapidly incoming data with expert precision. “Good, alright. We’re getting a good signal Charles!” he said.

Charles Maxell froze in fascination under the silver bowl on the ceiling; watching red stains spread through Paul’s punctured shirt. The body in front of him crumpled slowly, like a time-lapse of a dying plant.

“Looking good, looking good,” Travis drummed his fingers on the keyboard. The banks of computers around him hummed furiously. “Finish it Charles!”

Charles turned slowly to face Travis. “Jesus—God!” he said, voice cracking. He lifted the pistol, pointing it at Travis’s sweat-stained chest.

The younger man noticed the movement, took one stride toward Charles and backhanded the diminutive banker across the face. “What the fuck is wrong with you? You’ll throw this away?” he yelled.

“I—I’m sorry. I’ll—okay. Here,” the banker mumbled around the blood filling his mouth. He raised the pistol to his own temple.

“Oh for fuck’s sake!” Travis grabbed the old man’s arm and twisted it so the gun pointed at Charles’s breast pocket. “Do the heart; it’s not even yours,” he said. He turned his back on his old benefactor and went to a monitor.

“God—Oh, God! Forgive me,” Charles said.

“Only if this works,” Travis said to himself.

The gunshot echoed off the underground walls.

Screens all around the room lit up with reams of code, scrolling to fast for all but the most trained eyes to follow. Paul’s dying brainwaves, transmitted via millions of microscopic nano-machines to Travis’s receiver, merged with and amplified Charles’ last burst of consciousness. Charles’ personality and thought processes rode Paul’s brainwaves into the computer’s memory banks, filling thousands of petabytes of digital space.

The computer screens went black. A single green cursor blinked in the corner of one monitor. Travis stepped over a pool of spreading blood and waited at the screen. A coin sized portrait of Andrew Carnegie replaced the cursor. Travis held his breath.

Travis did it work said the portrait. Then, rapidly: I can move and it doesn’t hurt and I’m so free and I can stretch and I can fly. I remember again, Mom and Dad and school and the firm. And Travis? Travis, are you there?

Fingers trembling, Travis typed: This is Travis. Who are you?

Charles Bernard Maxell. I’m alone here. It’s so big. I’m so big. I remember a boy; he looked like a plant on the ground. What happened to Paul?

“I did it!” Travis yelled. “I beat it! I fucking did it!” he jumped in the air. He laughed long and loud at the floating portrait on the screen.